January 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM | By: Tracy
For those of you who aren't familiar with the blogfest here's the general gist: Participants choose from a list of pictures & create two brief - or in my case very brief - versions of the same scene. In one you SHOW what's going on and in the other you TELL. The idea being, no matter how good your TELL is, SHOW will always be better (just like in our own manuscripts. Get it?)
So here's my TELL version
There was venom in the princess' eyes as she forbade the knight to come one-step closer to the ailing dragon. He was beyond stunned that she viewed him as a villain and the monster as the victim. While he'd inflicted barely more than scratch on the beast's arm, she glared at him as though he was found guilty of kicking a puppy. Nor was the damned thing helping to further his cause by watching his every move with that frightened gaze.
And here's my SHOW version:
"If you come one step closer, by God, I will breathe fire on you myself."
Her scowl left him with no doubt the princess meant her words. "But . . . but, I was trying to defend you from that monster, Your Highness."
"Monster? Why, he's barely more than a baby." She stopped bandaging the beast's wound long enough to level him with another hard stare. "A baby you attacked like some senseless brute. I swear, you give a man a sword and he'll look for any excuse to use it."
His jaw dropped for a full second before he caught himself. "I am a knight. That is a dragon. I'm supposed to use my sword to protect you from this sort of thing. Besides, I barely scratched him."
"Well then, I suppose it's lucky for him, you're not very good at protecting me." She turned her attention to the skittish dragon beside her and a soothing lilt entered her voice. "There, there, it's all right. I won't let him hurt you anymore, little fellow."
Okay, so those were my entries. If you liked them, GREAT!
If you didn't, then you should go away because I don't like you very much. (kidding)
Anyhow, if you enjoyed this and are interested in seeing what the other blogfesters have done for their entires, click on the Blogfest banner above. And please stop by Misty's blog on Monday to vote for your favorite.